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I really have no idea what this, I'm serious
"humans may speak promises, but that never meant you'd keep true to your heart...your lockbox of pledges has been burned and thrown into the ashes of greed." Definitely quote-worthy. It's so true, and the way you worded it was like a cool stab to the heart. It made me ponder and agree.
Sorrow, sadness, for the deer and their lost home. But you gave it just the right amount of grief and empathy that it wasn't just sad, but it made me remember and want to do something to stop the forests from being destroyed for the sake for the sake of these deer(and all of them, of course).
What inspired you to write this? Just curious— it's packed with so much meaning and chilled emotions, it's gorgeous!
Major kudos to you, my friend! This is an amazing, beautiful, and heart-wrenching piece! You are very talented! The way you piece words together, and fit your meaning into the "simply complex"paradox of feelings and senses took my breath away!
I didn't realize the story was about deer until I read your comment underneath. Great job! It kept me wondering and gave a whole new meaning when they were deer, not humans(that was my misconception, sorry)
Keep it up!
(P.S. I think this would be a great piece to enter into the Environmental Writing contest that just opened— that is, if you would be interested. It's a great, deep take on nature! Great job!)