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'I watched, helpless, as they tore her heart open with their shovels, left her bleeding to death on a pile of massacred bushes and butchered rocks.' This is my favourite line, because it evokes so much emotion. You grow attached to the little girl, and to see her be torn apart like that is horrific, but the way you worded it was beautiful.
This piece reminds me of similar things that have happened near my home, and it brings back the anger I felt and clearly still feel.
This piece was lovely to read. It flowed beautifully and really had an impact on me. Well done!