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disparate

By: el


FREE WRITING

Strangled.
the aching cry of a wolf can be heard, 
listen closely 
my shapes are turning black
it's spreading

Stifled.
every fight becomes a war
someone change the song
the record's broken
so it just goes on
again

Smothered.
I cause pain, so this has to stop
release, 
a gunshot

Restrained.
I feel every pothole
not too dissimilar to my own
not a problem, I've heard.
until the city collapses beneath me

Swallowed.
you are not yourself, I see?
the rabbit in the hat, 
the man 
in the dress
a tea party

Contained.
I am happy now, they tell me.
The clouds in my sky are not like yours,
much brighter, much whiter, much lighter
there I go 
again

Silenced.

- E.L


Message to Readers

just tell me however you're feeling whilst reading, open to any criticisms, i hope you enjoy :)


Peer Review

Every fight becomes a war because i feel like that is very true in reality.


I feel quiet and shy again but upbeat still.


Where is your inspiration from?


Reviewer Comments

I love how you rhyme some things but not everything!