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I liked best the fact that you played up a very common scenario! This happens all the time, but it was special here because the reader felt the emotions. I was quite upset with Phillip, even though I know Santa isn't real!
The month of December will always remind her of the rude awakening to Santa's fake existence
It was a very good story, but I think it may have been missing some real reflection on what you think about th e month
Not completely, no. The story was so detailed that I expected a better ending. It was good, but it was such a long story for such a short ending
You are very good at sucking the reader into the story. I could see the whole thing playing out in my mind. Great job!