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Message to Readers
I'd love any advice you guys have!!! Please let me know what you think (;
I loved the clear tone of your voice.
Being with her family.
I'd like to hear your voice when telling the reader that you're an only child.
The ending was definitely the closing of a valuable memory for this writer.
KEEP WRITING! because it's something that you have a passion for, so don't quit.