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Can you tell me what parts you skimmed and became bored, so I can cut those parts?
I admired the tone! This is a really conversational piece - I can almost imagine it being read out loud and acted as it just jumps up from the page. The language is colloquial and much humour is created - it had me in creases as I read it.
This didn't come across much until the last paragraph explicitly, but the writer implied throughout that they associate it with laughter, games, fun and all that history of humour that she has with her family. It was much stronger to involve the reader in your anecdotes and the family jokes than to just tell us that they existed - and this really brightened my day!
It was a good balance of scene and reflection. There wasn't much reflection as such during the anecdotes so you could perhaps have added a couple of sentences with a moral or reflection at the end of each anecdote, but there's a risk that this would detract from the tone. I liked how you made it funny at the start and lapsed into reflection only at the end, as it made a great conclusion.
The ending was conducted perfectly, in my opinion. It's really strong to end on a passage of reflection, or so I thought - especially given that the rest of it has been a long strand of humour. That gave the ending a really conclusive feeling and ensured that we were left with something to think about after we'd finished reading. The one thing I would say is that the notions that you focus on in your conclusion aren't really what you've been emphasising the rest of the time - could you find a way to show the bit about getting over disappointments in the rest of your piece, maybe linking it to one of the anecdotes, rather than putting it in at the end without context?
This was a really, really strong piece! I couldn't stop laughing as I read it and structurally it's really sound - I love your idea of relating the month of December through anecdotes. This made it so much more fun to read. Your writing style is also excellent and sticks in one's mind as it's very unique.
Well done - I hope to see more of your work on the site in the future.