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Let me know what you think! This is a blending of multiple versions of the same story. It's the same story my year by year prompt piece is based on, as well as my other work about the willow. Thanks for any help you can give me!
I really like the line how you put how stars seemed to freeze time and the lover wished that was true. It really puts how the character wishes to keep her lover close and for as long as she could before he had to leave.
This piece really set a sad scene in the beginning but then how the character recalled the first time the lover had shone her the tree and stars, caused peace and happiness to spark put interest and calmness.
I really love this piece and you did very well describing it. I really like how you added a willow as an important part of the character's life along with how she loves the stars. This really reminds me of myself.