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Message to Readers
Tell me what you think! I want a better ending, so any suggestions are greatly appreciated.
"No more pain, Raven. No more pain." - For one thing, this is true about heaven. But it's sad, too. I got goosebumps when I read this.
Sadness . . . I grew to love Lillian. And the care that her siblings show is so sweet. You present strong emotions, and great details so that I got pulled right into the story. I wasn't even really lost for any previous detail.
Do you like the rain? How do you choose the names?
I love the names that you use in this. :) You also have a powerful way of showing emotions.