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Message to Readers
Any feedback is welcomed. Thanks for reading this poem and God bless you.
'Reminding me even when I feel alone,/ I'm never alone.' It wasn't only a really strong and resolved way to end, but also a really beautiful one too. It's quite a universal feeling, the sensation of comradeship in nature. For you that was obviously in feeling the brilliance of it all and associating it with God, and his creation of it - but this is even relatable to people who aren't religious because it's just such a recognisable feeling. I really get the sense that my problems are marginal when in nature, for example, because it reminds you of the real inherent beauty of the world, and that's not really a tenuous thing - it'll always be there, whatever's going on in your own life. I thought you really captured this idea well and it engaged me as a reader.
You use description really beautifully and you craft language really effectively. This helped to make me feel really at peace and will cause me to look twice at the beautiful things I walk past every day. Innumerable people have described the night sky, but you didn't do it in the same way as anyone else and didn't just play on stereotypes - you came up with your own individual and beautiful description of it. That was really beautiful.
What inspired it? I know it's a bit of a boring question but is this something you've always found to be the case or have you only just fully appreciated the soothing effects of nature?
You write really beautifully and this piece really engaged and attracted me from the outset. However, would you consider describing nature not just visually, but using the other senses too? It was really effective when you described the sensation of the breeze against your cheek - could you, though, maybe detail the range of aromas in nature or the sounds of the birds? This might help the reader to understand the largeness of nature and how incredible it is.
This was really enjoyable to read - you're an incredible writer and I hope to read more of your work in the future. Well done!