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Your mentioning the deaths caused by wearing shoes.
All of it was laid out very nicely, and in an orderly and attention-grabbing way. Including the almost back-story of the Air Jordans and Nikes helped me visualize and see the topic more clearly, and want to know more.
By you adding your view of the issue, and, while having it be a very professionalized article, giving a connected feeling.
If I were a publisher for a newspaper, I would definitely include this amazing article, "Shoes To Die For". In your use of words and language structure, the point of shoes and how serious a thing they are soaked in and gave the feeling of wanting to have an awareness of the world surrounding us.
Discovering your incredible talent of writing and reading this wonderful piece was a delightful experience, and I hope to read more!