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I find the title to be both attention catching, and ironic. very good choice. I think you did a great job explaining how supply and demand can influence criminal factors.
Perhaps elaborating more about the colors of the shoes, or the crazy "hectic-ness" of the people camping in front of stores in order to rush in. Or perhaps, really coloring one specific example of violence. This is a great piece that I think you can make even better by including just one vivid scene.
You did a great job showing that these shoes aren't just what keep you feet safe. They define you, and by wearing them, you are a part of the shoes culture. And, like you said, they define your safety.
The youtube comedian Yousef Arekat, or more commonly known as FouseyTube, has done different social experiments in the past. he has done a number of different ones, but perhaps one of the most revealing videos of society was when he posed as a homeless man sleeping with a pair of expensive air jordans sitting beside him. his video reveals that yes, people are willing to steal for want they want- even from a homeless man.
This is a great piece with no grammatical errors. I liked that you included specific dates (highlighted) and didn't make generalizations. You transitioned very smoothly from "yesterday's shoes" to today's shoes. I especially liked that you didn't place all the blame on the big companies, but instead handed the baton of responsibility over to the consumers.