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'When I was younger I used to write letters to my family'. This is particuarly nice because it's personal and creates an empathetic connection to the reader.
Early on, when the reason of expressing your feelings is mentioned because ultimately we write to communicate, do we not? Even if just with our future selves.
I would be very curious to learn more about your background so I could understand your writing style better. This is a good start for an answer and it was interesting to read. What I find incredibly frustrating is that you have a good skeleton here but with so many mistakes in the body - the syntax for example. Reread your work and reread it again. Words have been skipped and your grammar needs work. Always leave a space after commas and full stops. Capitalise I's. Think about better words to replace ones that don't seem to flow so well. Overall tgis is a good start. You made some nice and insightful points. It would have been great uf you could have clarified a few of them to create better flow. Well done though and never stop writing :)