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Feedback apreciated!! Thank you :)
hi! i really like the nostalgic touch you added to the piece :-) the parts of the past clearly juxtapose against the present, and i think that the words used subtly jab at the past, and twist it.
i wanted to know more about what exactly was so bad, but i suppose that was the point of the piece! i also felt a little confused by some of your sentences — they're winding, which are nice, but some of them are a little long!