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Message to Readers
This is how I imagine a mind might work when revising.
"We have much work to do so stop nodding along and get your head in the game." I think this is neat because it's the kind of thing I tell myself whilst revising.
Stress. My interpretation originally was that this poem represented different advice from teachers over time, so the flawed and conflicted education system that's shoved down our necks, but perhaps this is just because I don't like taking responsibility. Now I read it a second time I can see that it also works as a mental dialogue; a stream of consciousness, driven slightly mad with sleep deprivation. I like it (probably even more like this). You found a great balance of humour and rythm. And the topic is something that most people on this site can relate too.
What inspired you in particular at the moment? Are you procrastinating right now?
Please please please use 'you're' correctly. Your = his, hers, thier
You're = you are
Also I like the way you used syntax to create effect. The poem had great rhythm with an easy flow and nothing seemed forced. Well done. Look forward to reading your next piece.