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RedWriter

United States

Writing a bio for me is hard because I am myself and I could go on and on about how I think of me but would that be correct in others eyes? So I guess the only word I can really use to describe me is Bree and let my writing do the rest.

Message to Readers

This is how I imagine a mind might work when revising.

Revision

October 23, 2017

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Stop, stop, stop.
This is all wrong.
What do you think your doing?
Get that down!

Alright, silly,
That's better
Yes, good job.
But don't start preening yet!

Alright, yes, erase that.
This is better now, right?
Wrong!
We have much work to do so stop nodding along and get your head in the game.

Oh shush!
You know I'm write
Ha, get it?
Well don't stop to stare if your not going to laugh!

Yes! That is how we do it!
Just add that comma instead of an and because it will take the place.
See? You remember even when those kids wouldn't listen to you.
I know your smart, not just fluff between your ears

That was not an invitation to stray from the task.
Gosh, you can't be bragging yet!
Come on, we've got work to do!
I am this close to loosing my patience with you and your under appreciation for my jokes.

Not funny?
I'll show you funny
Or I would if I had a mirror!
Ha, see? They get meaner when you don't at least offer smiles.

This is good, now we can afford to merge the sentence.
Use the semicolon
Aha! Eureka! But don't go jumping out your bathtub and running down the streets just yet (cough, Archimedes, cough).
Now sign it!

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How it is to revise.

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2 Comments
  • rainandsonder

    This was a really amusing poem. Great work!


    almost 2 years ago
  • AbigailSauble

    Interesting history reference at the end. :P Yeah, this is true.
    Keep writing!
    God bless!


    almost 2 years ago