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I like the idea behind your piece, very unique. The only problem is it gets lost sometimes with the execution, the worst being at the third sentence. No big mistakes or anything though. May want to look up some synonyms for friend or maybe name him/her. Probably just me being picky, but you use the word friend back to back for the J and K sentences. Overall, very good. Best of luck!