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My favorite line in this piece has to be when the author talks about how "every bone in [their] body wants to be close to her..." It's such a cheesy and cute line because it really shows how much the author wants to be with this girl.
This moment is beautiful! I would write about it myself if it happened to me! They're in love with this girl who is pretty and she kisses them and makes them become dizzy with affection for her. It shows someone whose heart has been taken by the girl name Jeanne and it's a beautiful piece.
Great writing! To be honest, all the lines in this piece are my favorite; thanks for sharing!