United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland
I am 15 years old and live in England. I am currently doing my GCSE's and my favourite subject by far is English and I absolutely love reading!!
I would like to know how to make my writing sound more sophisticated
My mum is always saying that I waffle a lot and my ideas do not flow throughout my writing
Although naturally I do not believe her
I would love to hear your thoughts about my writing and see if these points are true or if she is being over critical ;)
Written By: Aishah
June 1, 2014
When the doctor said your name I cried. All along I knew it was true, but I prayed that it be anything. Just not you. It felt like a part of me had died inside. I didn’t want to believe it to be true
Every day you suck my soul away, You eat me alive. All I can do now is pray, That you die and I survive
I will not let you win this battle. I will fight you until the day I die.