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I'd like any advice, edits, or comments on my novice writing. Thanks guys!
'I pressed my face against the window pane of the airplane.' It drew me in further. I was wondering why the m.c. (main character) was pressing her nose against the window of an airplane. I also liked the lines that I highlighted.
I think it's because you moved to China (as on your profile) and you miss America. This was a moment that changed your life. How long have you lived in China?
Well done! You caught a good bit of quiet nostalgia and emotion in this piece. Making me hope that I never leave USA for a long period of time.