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Caged Bird, Caged Heart

By: † Skyward Bound †


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You cage your heart,
Trap it behind iron bars of defense.
You cage your heart,
Because it was a fragile, fluttering thing
It leapt at all those who took an interest
Even the cat, who waited to strike
The cat who toyed with your heart,
Bashed it, bruised it,
Shattered it, then left.
You cage your heart,
To protect the broken bird,
From being torn apart again.
The cat made you believe
That love was a dangerous and painful game
So you cage your heart,
When it yearns for the cloudless skies,
To come.
 
But then, He comes.
Your heart stirs, the bird sings.
The prison is slowly melted,
By words of love and encouragement.
Your hand is reluctant,
Your head screams logic,
But your heart battles for control.
It didn’t learn from the cat’s claws.
It didn’t learn from its thin white scars.
Its been caged too long,
Its wings restless.
So with a shaky hand, you unlock the cage.
The bird looks at Him,
Unsure, but hopeful
It stretches its broken wings,
Daring to fly,
When it should have learned
That birds with broken wings,
Only fall.
 
But then your broken heart.
Learns that this kind of love,
The forever kind of love,
Heals broken birds,
This kind of love,
Helps broken wings mend
And broken birds soar.

What do you think?

Message to Readers

This is one of my first poems. Hope you guys like it!


Peer Review

I like the two lines 'Help broken wings mend, and broken birds soar'. This is amazing to me what with the last one being my favorite. It shows that even when someone has been brought down they can always come back from it if they take that chance, the chance to heal.


Happy. I felt sad at the beginning, then hopeful, then happy and restored.


I don't really have any questions.


Reviewer Comments

I think this is a great short poem.