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' And that's always the hardest problem to solve, isn't it? When it's yourself that's the problem and not anything or anyone else.' I thought this was a really strong way to end the piece because it turns all the terror, all the hardships and torment of the rest of the piece onto the narrator. This obviously hasn't occurred to the reader: after all, the narrator appears subject to a number of events in the woods that are completely out of their control. Thus, the narrator turning the tide of blame upon his/herself appears strange to the reader and really encourages us analyse the symbolism of the wood. It is, of course, true that the narrator enters the wood (and apparently with no reason) and makes the mistake of jumping from the cliff: it is their own actions which lead them to the terror marking the nightmare in a crafty piece of metaphor for the inability of the narrator to communicate with their loved one. Yet we do not necessarily notice this the first time round, and so the final line almost makes us turn round and re-analyse everything we have just read. I found that very effective.
It's such a remarkably clever piece that it really leaves me analysing my own actions and decisions, and how far they are actually my own fault. It's so tempting to think of oneself as the victim, and although the narrator of this piece seems to think too far in the opposite fashion, it's so interesting to be forced to analyse how far one brings hardship upon oneself by refusing to speak to those whom one is close to.
What inspired it? I know that's a very generic question, but I just find the central metaphor so intriguing that I keep wondering where you could have got it from.
I wonder if you write poetry often? This piece works best as a piece of prose, I think that's very well-judged, but you have such a brilliant ear for rhythm and sound that I imagine you'd be a very good Larkin-esque poet. You are also a very structurally sound writer, and you use it very well, which is obviously a massive advantage in poetry. I imagine you'd come up with some excellent verse.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. It's a work you should be very proud of! I look forward to seeing more of your writing in the future :)