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please help me and leave a review i am so crap at writing you can put it down on your resume as a charity activity
I love the description of the dog and the dog. I also like how you use sleepy to describe the word sunlight. For some reason this really helps me to imagine teh kind of day.
You don't really mention smell but that's not to say your piece needs it.
I can really feel this piece. I can feel my own dog resting on my lap, sitting on the stairs of my grandmother's porch. You're amazing.