Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
Message to Readers
please help me and leave a review i am so crap at writing you can put it down on your resume as a charity activity
"the sunlight is filtering through the tress, dancing on the earth, bathing the whole scene in a sleepy, soft light" the description of the setting feels so peaceful with this added detail.
maybe a little more description of each smell, and what's being felt? (like: is the sunlight warm? is the grass soft or itchy?)
this was so vivid and peaceful, i absolutely loved it!