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Message to Readers
This was inspired by a sweet, sad little comic called "But you Didn't". If you haven't read it, you ought because it's wonderful. I've always wanted to write something of a similar format and here it is. Let me know what you think!
"We were sandwiched together on the subway, I in my large-framed glasses and plum coloured sweater, you in your windbreaker and Converse". This line stood out to me as it was a lovely, neat little description of the characters which gave me an insight to both personalities. It is a well written and eloquently placed line which made the characters in my head very visible.
THIS WAS SO CUTE AND NOW I'M CRYING! It was honestly so good; a stunning little piece which started out so adorable and perfect and ended on a hard hitting paragraph which totally made it. DAMN! Really good!
I know you said it was inspired by a comic but did it have any resemblance to events in your life?
I adored this piece. I loved the structure of it, the way it lead me on a happy little journey and then BAM. Cuteness over. It was fantastic and could you please, please, please write some more?