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Message to Readers
Please let me know how you feel afterwards and summarize my poem in one sentence so that I can see where to work on getting my message across more clearly. I hope you can relate (or rather, for your sake, that you can't). What do you think of the word I coined?
"But Reality has the coldest touch" indeed.
This made me feel the estrangement of watching someone you desire walk away, it's painful and romantic all at once.
Falling in love with strangers is a dangerous business, isn't it?
Falling in love and then parting-- it seems you had forgotten to pick up your heart before she walked away with it. I can relate.