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The first line is amazing. I love it. Keep it no matter what.
Like I'm going to be thrown into an amazing world with awesome characters and it's gonna be a wild ride of a street urchin who sounds sarcastic but philosophical and someone I really want to meet him/her.
What's the main character's name? Any inspiration? Are you going to post more of this story? What's the title? Okay I know that's more than one question but I have more than one question.
Stay with this story, it's already really good and I want to continue.