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Just by reading the first few sentences I knew that this piece was exactly what I've been looking for. For the past 4 months, I have been searching far and wide for a piece that could represent how I'm feeling; this is it. Thank you.
Everywhere! I don't know the context but I don't need to. To me, this piece is a feeling; not necessarily a scenario.
Keep going, but I don't think any changes are necessary. :)
My only additional comment is that, for me, switch the 'he' and 'she' around. It's not very often that what you described in this piece happens to the 'he' instead. <3