Peer Review by Ash (United States of America)()

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By: Maya


PROMPT: Six-Word Story

1. The moon hung, swaddled in darkness

2. The flames danced, blinding the stars

3. Answers escaped her, questions begged acknowledgement

 


Peer Review

First story sounds like disaster is upon us.
Second story keeps that tone.
Last one sounds like the reader is taken to the moment something crazy is revealed to "her", something she just can't possibly understand.


First one is a nice description of the night sky with a good use of mode elements. Second expands on the first. The third story fills the reader with a sense of helplessness.


Reviewer Comments

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