Peer Review by Annabella Twomey (United States)

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Writing Her

By: Tia Lea


FREE WRITING

Writing can be gruelling.
It can be hard to describe something how you see it,
As if no word in the English Language could ever come close
To describing the beauty of the sunset.
And the way her eyes gleamed,
Looking out towards the deep blue ocean.
It can be difficult to describe just how much,
your heart ached when she left.
And it can be hard to say,
Even though it's been months and she's moved on,
Everyday you feel something missing inside.
Your lost puzzle piece.


Message to Readers

Any kinds of feedback is very welcome, every thing helps.


Peer Review

"As if no word in the English Language could ever come close To describing the beauty of the sunset. And the way her eyes gleamed, " I love how you made the transition from a landscape to a person, the center of this poem.


It is a feeling of soft sadness and sentimentality because someone was lost in this poem and someone moved on. It is described quite well.


Did you also write the poem "Writing Him"? If so, it could be cool to connect these pieces even more!


Reviewer Comments

Awesome job with this piece! I love the way you switch between describing the ocean and "Her." If possible, I would go into a little more detail about her, more descriptions, and her actions/personality traits, just to give more visual to the poem. Great job!