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A girl reflecting on her world.
It's very vivid. Your description is always there for a reason, either leading into the next line or helping the reader get a sense of the main character.
I'd like to know where exactly she is. We know the place is falling apart but beyond that the location could be anywhere from an apartment complex to a mental institution. Also, I really love the ending, but I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say. I understand you're making reference to her smoking methodology, but beyond that I'm lost. Is she serious about wanting to talk or is it more of her just going through the motions?
I really liked this piece. There weren't that many errors, but you need to pay attention to what exactly you're trying to convey to your readers. Your descriptions are beautiful, but be aware that lengthy descriptions can sometimes end up confusing the readers instead of helping them. That being said, I really loved your story!