Peer Review by Ash (United States)

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Humans

By: Kyra Young


PROMPT: The Unknown

I don't know much about humans
They're emotional, loud, destructive creatures
Changing their minds ever 2 seconds
I want food
No sleep
When does it all stop
Hopefully soon


Peer Review

Second and third lines. They flow extremely well.


Humans are weird.


Confusion. I'm not sure what you're trying to say at the very end. What is 'it'? Your lack of knowledge of the creatures? Life in general?


Reviewer Comments

It's extremely interesting that you decided to write about humans. Most people would rule it out as a topic on the grounds of they themselves are a human, but think about it: how many things do we actually know for sure about our race? We're still unlocking the mysteries behind human nature and our brains in general, and of course, there's still the great nature vs nurture debate.

I really enjoy your piece, and I would like to see you elongate it and expand on your ideas.