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Constructive criticism is welcome. I'm just a beginner, and this is a piece of rushed work. i hope you all enjoy it as much as i enjoyed writing it
"Show them that there is still hope. " I love the sheer optimism present in this line. It really is exemplary of a unique writing style - as seen by the short sentence structure. The word 'show' also adds to the creative aspect of the piece as it gives a sudden urge and vitality to the magic/hope present in the line.
After reading this piece, I feel as if there is actually an ethereal presence in my life that remains untouched. I have always believed in the mysteries of the universe especially the magical ones- but never seemed to acknowledge them in the creative way you have. Thank you for making the reader feel an epiphany of magic just by reading your piece.
Do you still believe this Magic will be enlivened for the rest of your life, taking into account the fate of mankind?
This piece has so much raw power in regard to the sheer liberalism of ideas present as well as forceful word choice. There are very few pieces that urge readers to think so deeply about a largely disregarded notion -- and this is one of them. The only thing I would consider adding is more substance to the piece such as logical appeal (logos) since you already have ample of rhetoric. Overall, this piece really and truly delves into our fantasized viewpoints of magic and brings some light to the issue. Please keep writing!