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Critique as harshly as you can. I would especially like feedback on the second to last paragraph, and on the line about "corrupted hope" but anything would help!
It's very tight and concise. I like it, it flows well with the message in the poem.
This is actually very clear, it makes you realize or understand something simply because you've put it into words.
"Quit without saving." This hit me hard, because struggles are so important to becoming better and quitting without saving just makes my heart hurt. It drives home to me the desperation and frustration the author feels.
I felt... honest? I feel like I've been more understood and kind of inspired actually.
You have so much to say and you can! You are going to be great! Do not fear cliches!! Make them your own! Tame the cliche and use it in a way that has never been used before! You are your own greatest enemy and you will do fabulously.