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The beautiful use of metaphor. The writer has written their story in the form of an allegory, with a suitable moral message, and the flowers and wildness growing in their garden seems to be a metaphor for the fact that the Svensky family need to essentially stop being so uptight and place less emphasis on trivial matters such as the state of their garden, instead choosing to build lifelong attachments that will contribute to their happiness. It's beautifully and astonishingly subtly crafted. But as well as this, the writing style is engaging (despite some small grammatical errors) and the use of structure especially I found very clever. It's really very good fun throughout and definitely one of my favourite pieces I've read for this competition.
If I'm honest, I was never left with the sense that anything was lacking - it was sustained throughout and I understood everything. Definitely some illustrations would be very nice in this because the writer does use a lot of very beautiful linguistic description and the imagery is strong throughout.
It's an incredibly good idea for a story and I'm disappointed I didn't read this in a book as a child! You've managed to make the characters three dimensional in a very short space of time with minimal description which is very impressive. I'm enchanted with your use of language throughout really.
Keep it up - I really love this and hope to read more of your work in the future.