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Probably the first whole paragraph. I love the moody feeling you create to set the scene of this story. (I'm a sucker for gray, rainy morning atmospheres!)
A sense of mystery. I'm intrigued by what happened with Jasmine. I want to know more about what happened.
Why did Jasmine leave? (Not necessary to include in the piece, I'm just curious.
I love this piece of prose! Like I said, the mastery with which you develop your setting leaves me in awe. Keep writing!