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I always adore peer reviews on my work! I always work really hard on my stories, and I love hearing what you guys think of it!
Thank you in advance!
"I felt the smooth round bulbous shape of a phone, and let out a sigh of relief." This was so descriptive! Great job.
Well, I'm feeling mixed emotions about the plot twist. It was really good, but I was so into the character being trapped inside the store when *BAM* they were with the group of people who broke in.
Could you give me some hints and ideas on how to do some plot twists? I find it really hard, but you make it look so easy!
Have I mentioned that this was utterly aMaZiNg?!? I loved it so so so so so much. Great job.