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The Greatest Power

By: Caitlyn Mulcahy


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Children are powerful. We demand attention.
With a tear we can draw every eye,
With a smile we can earn any trust,
With a word we can change your mind,
With a laugh we can make all listen. 
At a glance we can tell whether to approach or retreat,
At a glance we can tell what needs to be said. 
We can make you, adults, cry, frown, hope and regret. 
We can make you drive for hours,
Stay awake all night, Worry all day.
You are forced to trust us. Trust me. 
We hear everything, we understand the words and the pauses and the pain and the frustration. 
When you whisper to each other the walls become paper,
Even your shaking breath echoes around my room. 
We can make you angry, make your heart break.
Understand me dear adults, when I say, 
Children are powerful. 
But only so, when you need, you can be weak. 


Peer Review

"When you whisper to each other the walls become paper,'" This is a touching way to show that children understand, that they are smarter than adults think they are. I think the relationship between parents and children is really illustrated here.


A sense of shared understanding. That every child is powerful. That they aren't dumb puppies. That they matter, we matter.


What was the inspiration for this?


Reviewer Comments

I really loved this piece.