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Altered it a little bit, not too sure if it works or not. I don't write poetry very often and any commentary would be much appreciated!
It's a piece that describes the horror of test-taking.
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The line "As my breath meets the air" for the reasons stated on the text.
Is there a reason you don't include the word 'the' before nouns such as 'pen,' 'desk,' 'heart,' 'chest,' etc? It just is very noticeable that the word is missing.
Besides that, I really enjoyed the piece. Great work!