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It's a short little love poem with a twist (yes, I'm aware I think they're overrated and cliches, just read it: it's not even ten lines).
You manage to keep things brief yet profound.
A lot of people end up elongating the piece just to add more words, not realizing they're actually weighing down their piece. Your piece may be short, but it doesn't feel like you left anything out. Nice job!