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Message to Readers
"The safety of silence" is one of my favorite lines, just because I like how it sounds. But in each section there was a specific line that stood out because it was repeated multiple times. For example, in Part 1, it would probably be "a terrible tendril of anxiety". Not only is this line repeated, but it is the beginning and ending.
I was left feeling satisfied by the end, because there is development through the poem. This is clear, even just by looking at the subtitles.
What inspired this piece? How did you decide to break it into three distinct parts?
I felt there were good literary devices in here, that blended(meaning they actually worked in the story-that you didn't just add them in cause- and transitioned smoothly. I especially liked your repetition.
One thing I'm not sure about it the repetition of alliteration. There aren't any rules that say you can't combine two literary devices in one, but I felt that was already fantastic repetition and alliteration without it.
I really enjoyed this poem. I thought it was pretty unique to split the poem into three parts, but it totally worked. I hope my comments help!