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Honestly, I couldn't choose. If I do, I would be doing injustice to the other lines. There is something about the first line that intrigues and fascinates me, something about the repeated lines that move me, and something about the last line that completes the jigsaw of the meaning inside my head.
Sympathetic, and grateful. It feels like something one can relate to when we sleep next to a close one or even miss them.
Is there someway that you can expand this piece? How else would you describe captured feelings? Would this bottle be full?
The poem is very true and moving. The way the lines have been indented create a subtle flow that helps the poem. There are some deep metaphors and references and alliteration that complete it as a poem! I look forward to read more.