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Message to Readers
This is the third chapter
i'd say, "So I read this really interesting piece today, read it and promise you won't get mad."
"The evil Audrey." This is the strongest part of this piece, because the entire writing evolves around 'The Evil Audrey.' Those three words, make the piece what it is.
"I get that all the time." Do you get told not to slap someone in your sleep, because it will not end well, or...
"SHE EPICLY SUCKS!!!!!!!" Doesn't everyone? I mean, humanity sucks.