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This is actually a very nice story. I ended up nitpicking a lot of grammar things, but that's because you don't have any larger issues for me to focus on! You really do a great job of capturing the feeling of "tension in the car" and all the worry and stress and anxiety that comes out of that. Look at the grammar stuff, and some redundant words, but overall, very well done!