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I want your honest opinions. Don't spare my feelings; this needs work. Please keep your comments short, clean, and to the point.
Her switch between being in business mode and flirtatious mode is very interesting. She clearly has the ability to focus and get things done but also to have fun. But you have to respect her ability to stay in control and headed towards her goal... until someone else gets in the way.
I really don't want to keep reading, because we all know what happens next and no one wants to see it happen. But the dynamic between Guadalupe and Mr. Handsome is obviously the driving force of the story, and something which takes a sharp turn at the end.
You do a good job bringing several different elements together in such a short piece. I've marked some of the times where you can work towards streamlining it more, stripping out redundancies and clarifying some things. But overall your piece is short and to the point. You have something you want to demonstrate (vulnerability to predation on better instincts) and you demonstrate it will. The story is heart-wrenching because of the depravity and injustice of the events which take place. If you really want to hammer this home, I'd add in some more comments about the theme of appearance -- in particular, the guy focusing on her appearance -- and some more characterization of Guadalupe as someone who is eager to help and optimistic about the future. But overall you have a good piece that works well!