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What kind of feel did you get from this city? Is it a unique enough idea?
The description about the glowing ashes raining from the sky most caught my attention. The description was vivid and full of warm imagery that enhanced the theme of light that the piece had throughout.
I'd say the feeling of this city is a feeling of safety. The city seems fragile and thin ("Glass bridges drape from building to building, trembling in the slightest breeze", and "Clothed in gossamer fibers") but in the void of darkness that surrounds it, it still shines bright. Darkness does not seem to be an ominous threat for this city, as it feels secure in its own light.
I would like to know where all the light comes from. Besides the mellow lamps, no other sources of light were mentioned. Does the light come from the sun that we know? Does the city have some magical way of generating light?These are questions that stuck with me throughout the piece.
This piece was truly magical. Warm, vivid, and descriptive imagery immersed me in your City of Lights, making me feel safe and hopeful. Going forward, I would like to know where the lights in the City of Lights come from, but besides that I have nothing else to say. Great Job!