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The description. There is a ton of beautiful description throughout the piece that really sets the mood. I especially love the description of the girl. It is absolutely beautiful and I hope you expand on this! If you turn this into a book, I'd definitely read it!
I am left with a feeling of mystery and intrigue. Who is this girl? Where did she come from? What happened to her? Why is this creature after her? It's amazing and I love it!
What inspired you to write this? It was absolutely beautiful with the description and the mystery you left with it. I really want to see where it goes! What is the story behind this story?
I loved this piece. It was beautifully written and the description was lovely. The only thing I would suggest is that you move the paragraph talking about this creature that is hunting the girl to the very beginning. You don't have to. It just might sound interesting like that, but it is also amazing the way it is. I hope you expand on this further and good luck in the future!