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The opening sentence is draws you in. We all can relate to being stuck at a red light when we are in a hurry to be somewhere.
I really like how you implied that someone ran a red light, got in an accident, survived, got advice from their older self, but then apparently forgot that advice and runs a red light again. it brings the story full circle, and I'm left speculating what happens after the character runs the red light for the second time. nice job :)
The middle section seemed rather vague and out-of-sync with the rest of the story. Is this supposed to be the 21 year old male or someone else who is in danger of running a red light?
You have a really interesting idea here. Keep building on it and I can't wait to see where you take it. Hope this helps. Have any questions, please ask.
Feel free to completely disregard everything I have said. Its your story.
Good luck in the competition!