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Message to Readers
This story starts right into the action of the story and also uses dialogue that doesn't necessarily invite immediate attention to the danger of what is about to happen. There is mystery with the reader's initiate ease of reading this sentence and I really love how you set up this complexity.
After the second section of dialogue, the reader can suppose that Jaron did indeed, get into a wreck. And by the next line, this is proved correct since the location is at a hospital.
As I mentioned in one of the highlights, I wasn't sure about the other doctor/nurse and when or even if they left the room, but if they didn't, I'd really like to see (or read) their response to the peculiar scene in front of them. Also, I would work on the structure of this story because there are a lot of time and scene changes, so I would just be aware of where you add separation between paragraphs, and where you don't.
I like how you turned the wish of meeting your future self and putting a dangerous twist on it, it really adds to the suspicion and brings a new understanding of if we truly want to meet our future selves. The message you have here keeps the reader thinking after reading this story.
If you have any more questions, don't hesitate to ask! And of course, these are all suggestions for you to take or leave. I wish you good luck in the competition and have a good day/night :)