Peer Review by Flint Gusberry (United States)

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By: Extrasweet

    The waves crash against my knees. Just with a simple slice, a broken seashell cuts my knee, making the water swirl with blood red. I quickly get out of the water, grasping the shell that cut me tight in my hand.
    I storm back home and tell my mom. “A worthless broken shell cut my knee! I hate it!”
    Mom shakes her head. “No, it’s worth something. It cut your knee, after all.” She replies.
    I stare at her. “But it’s just a shell.”
    Mom nods as if that explained everything.“Exactly.”

Message to Readers

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Peer Review

I love beaches and (due to the title) this seemed like a story about them. I also loved that line of waves "crashing."

the line of "waves crash against my knees" establishes that the narrator is at the beach. the dialogue between the narrator and their mom also builds character as the story progresses without having to tell us much.

nope! I think this was pretty clear.

Keep going! this looks like it's going in a great direction and I already love the theme that's popping up here :D

Reviewer Comments

thanks for reading this review! I hope it helped you in some way :)