Peer Review by Riley Noel (United States)

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Begin Again

By: yapyapxy


FREE WRITING

Life has no real
beginning, a story
holds many starts

Friendship is a lifelong
puzzle, family 
a language, love an art

Each leaves footprints
and perhaps a few of them cut

But don’t be afraid, don’t
fear scabs and blood —
here’s to learning again, dearest
patchwork-mended heart


Message to Readers

second version; thank you for stopping by to read :')

Would "family/a language, love an art" be clearer with "family/is a language, love is an art"?


Peer Review

I love the opening lines. I think they are so powerful and a great way to start off the poem.


Hope, like everything is going to be okay, like I can push a reset button and try again when I feel like giving up.


What was the inspiration for this piece?


Reviewer Comments

This is a great piece with a beautiful amount of emotion in it and it reads so well together.
P.s I think " is a language/ love is an art" would sound better:)